"See you at the porch tomorrow," I told Dave Bonta in my comment posted in his Morning Porch blog. I did at 11 a.m., and the poem below takes the form of a monologue. As a context, this should accommodate the central image of the poem suggested by the given line (below). All it took was for the creation of a combination of images to objectify the poetic experience.
A map through a tabula rasa of life and living takes the form of "winding parallel lines of arrows...missing only the X." Nothing preordained, no buried treasure. Just lines on the trail. It is a map full of caveat emptors.
Here is the given line:
A skim of snow on the walk is imprinted with winding, parallel lines of arrows like a child’s map of buried treasure, missing only the X.---Dave Bonta, Morning Porch (http://www.morningporch.com/)
A CHILD'S MAP TO EREWHON
That there is a child’s map of buried treasure
On a skim of sidewalk snow.
Look, don’t they look like parallel lines
Of arrows winding down to an erewhon?
Erewhon? O, that’s “nowhere” scrabbled
Backwards, and it’s a new game, you know.
Quite like tearing around for some gold
At the foot of the lingering rainbow.
Must have been the neighbour’s boy
Absently raking leaves jutting out of crannies
On the trail of blank snow, drawing lines
Toward a warm home but missing the X.
A child’s map is all we need this time,
Just lines to somewhere, arrows into the air.
--- ALBERT B. CASUGA
2 comments:
Hi Manong Albert - for precision - among my "working guidelines" (just for myself), is the idea of spending *no more than* thirty minutes writing a poem-response.
That's what I really meant, Luisa, hence the "wish-I-had-done-that" dream. Imprecise as imprecise is. But, really, those Morning Porch reactions ARE poems. Looking forward to more. See you at the Porch.
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